In a room quiet enough
for one or two sentences,
they wait for their
breath instead of finding
the words that could save them.

In a room quiet enough for one or two sentences, they wait for their breath instead of finding the words that could save them. |
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I'm fuckin' it real.
A rose blooms in the desert.
lol i haet writin.
Oh, and thanks.
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I'm fuckin' it real.
A rose blooms in the desert.
erg.
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I'm fuckin' it real.
A rose blooms in the desert.
On the poem: Love.
It reminds me of [link] <-- well, a little, since it mentioned words. I think I am only tying the two together because I just re-read that poem. Drats.
I love how it's simple but seems to resound in the little text box.
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This is the way the world ends,
not with a bang but a whimper"
--The Hollow Men, T. S. Eliot.
deviantART has done a number of things over the last few years that has seemed, well, stupid.
Your fix on it makes me think pretty much the same thing.
I don't know how I missed this before. You'll have to accept my apology.
I would say 'Horror' is more appropriate seeing how frightening it is that some people insist on... well... 'cold silence'. I think this captures that lack-of-passion relationship so prominent in society.
I don't really have any suggestions for improvement at the moment. I find that common with this style (perhaps it's the reason for my sudden interest). I like this.
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'I am leaving, I am leaving. But the fighter still remains.'
This is actually what I love about feedback, hearing how people react to it. I really had no idea how to categorize the work in terms of genre placement, but reading the thoughts of others here explain that it is, indeed, a subjective effort and unnecessary to even try.
You're just as correct in your reasoning as another would be finding the romance in it, and I love that about people.
It makes me want to explore your mind... but I don't think I will.
Oh, and surely, thank you.
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